21,700 Words and Teaser Sentence of the Week
Chapter Eight is the way I want it to be.
And I normally don't approve of one sentence "zinger" paragraphs that understate some shocking thing for effect. BUT - you need to use every tool in the toolbox, so here's one of those!
"The four-thousand pound bomb that had smashed a piece of masonry into Greta Hahn’s head was of a type nicknamed 'cookies' by the RAF crews, and the Hahns had just been subjected to a process the Allies described as 'dehousing.'"
And I normally don't approve of one sentence "zinger" paragraphs that understate some shocking thing for effect. BUT - you need to use every tool in the toolbox, so here's one of those!
"The four-thousand pound bomb that had smashed a piece of masonry into Greta Hahn’s head was of a type nicknamed 'cookies' by the RAF crews, and the Hahns had just been subjected to a process the Allies described as 'dehousing.'"
posted by KPaffenroth at
1:26 PM
2 Comments:
You may want to make that a four thousand pound bomb.
Clearly I read the .doc file more than the blog. But there it is.
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